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Every year for the past three years, My Faith Radio has held a writing contest, open to anyone. This year, writers were asked to write a story either non-fiction or fiction, exploring the concept of Grace. The story was to be at least 700 words, but no more than 1000.
This is the first year I entered the contest, with a short fictional story called Urchin's Chance. Unfortunately, though I submitted it on time and according to the rules, it somehow did not make it to the voting page. I'm really not sure what happened, but whatever the case, my story is not up for readers to vote on.
Oh well! I thought since it didn't make the contest, I might as well post it here. And, since this is no longer bound by the contest rules, I'm giving you the long version- just over 1000 words. Tell me what you think- did it have a chance at winning? Let me know in the comments below. Enjoy!
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URCHIN'S
CHANCE
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A
bitter wind bites my cheeks and sends a shudder through my chest. I
feel the cold deep within my bones. My nose starts to run, but my
skin is so chapped that the rough wool of my gloves will only hurt
more.
Jerome
stares out at the people passing by, snowflakes landing lightly on
his black hair. He doesn't seem cold. But he's a year or two older
than me, and he's been on the streets since he was ten, so he's used
to it by now.
Without
glancing my way, he nods slightly. “Do you see that, Tim?”
I
look, trying to quell my shivers. Across the street, I can see a
street vendor setting up his stand. Even from here I can smell the
scent of roasted corn. My mouth waters.
“We'll
have to be careful- I can see Bruiser on the corner.”
I
see him too. Bruiser is a bobby- but he's got a savage streak. I've
seen him beat a boy almost a year younger than me for pick-pocketing.
He's less interested in upholding the law than he is in showing off
his power.
“Let's
go,” says Jerome. Without a word, I follow.
We
weave through the crowds. People aren't paying much attention to us.
We keep our heads up, but our eyes down. If you don't make eye
contact, people don't remember you.
I'm
nearing the vendor now. The smell lights me up, makes me warm
inside. I'm so close- in just a few minutes, my stomach won't be
growling any more.
I
meet Jerome's eyes, and he nods. I move toward the stand, bumping
into a man in front of me. He stumbles forward, upsetting the stacks
of corn and knocking several cobs onto the cobblestones. In the
blink of an eye, I gather them up and shove them down my coat. I
toss two more to Jerome before propelling myself to a run.
It's
a moment or two before anybody realizes we've stolen food. I hear
someone yell, but it's too late- we're well on our way. No one will
pursue us for something as little as corn cobs.
Breathlessly,
I lean up against a wall and share a smile with Jerome. He chuckles.
“Can
we eat now?” I ask.
“Go
ahead, enjoy your spoils,” he says with a smile. “It won't be
your last- that's not the only gold we've nicked today.”
I
look at him quizzically. From his pocket, Jerome pulls a shining
chain. It's a watch, glistening in the white winter glow. My eyes
widen.
“I
got it off a gentleman back there, in the confusion.”
“Wow,
Jer'...” I gape at it. He smiles proudly.
“I
think it's safe to say we won't be hungry for a long time.”
I
open my mouth to congratulate him, but at that moment, a shout makes
me start. I turn, scrambling to my feet. Men are running towards
us, and Bruiser is a the front.
I
hardly have time to think. I try to follow Jerome as he runs, but
he's going too fast. I trip over an empty crate and crash to the
ground. Corn cobs roll around me, soiled in the filthy snow. The
watch is lying in front of me.
“Oi,
stop, you nasty little thief!” a rough hand seizes of my shoulder
and I cry out. A moment later, I feel Bruiser's bobby stick come
crashing down on my skull, making me dizzy with pain. I am thrown to
the ground. My breath leaves me, and I throw my arms up to cover my
face from his next blow.
It
never comes. I gasp for breath, trying to fill my lungs with much
needed air. My head spins, and my vision is blurry. I dimly see the
shape of a man struggling with Bruiser. I don't care... my eyelids
droop, and my head falls back on the pavement. I know no more.
I
sit in a cold cell. My head pounds, and my hands feel shaky. The
rough wooden cot puts slivers through my breeches, but I'm not
thinking about it. I'm thinking about what's going to happen to me,
now that I'm behind bars.
I
don't know what they do to thieves when they're caught. Maybe
they'll beat me and put me back on the streets. Maybe I'll be sent
to a workhouse, or to an orphanage. Whatever it is, I dread it.
Hearing
footsteps as they approach, I look up. I gulp as I see the warden
with his keys jangling. A gentleman stands behind him. There is
blood running down the gentleman's forehead from a fresh gash, but he
pays it no mind.
The
warden unlocks the door and scowls at me. He jerks his head,
motioning me to come forward.
“Come
here, boy,” he growls.
Trembling,
I stand and approach. At a sign from the warden, I walk through the
cell door. I look up at him, confused.
“Excuse
me....” I say, my voice quavering, “but, aren't I-”
“Shut
your trap, young 'un. This gentleman here's just paid a pretty sum
to get you out. You're his concern now.”
The
warden gives me a withering look and turns his shoulder. Snorting,
he trudges down the dark hallway, leaving me with the gentleman.
Swallowing,
I turn to look up at him. He sees the question in my eyes and gives
me a kind smile.
“Yes,
it's true,” he says. “I've paid your fine.”
I
stare at him, my mouth open. I try to think of something to say, and
my eyes focus on the gash on his forehead.
“You're
bleeding,” I say dumbly.
“Yes.
It was a blow meant for you, in fact.”
My
eyes widen as I realize who he is. He was the man who was struggling
between Bruiser and I. He stopped the blow before it came.
The
gentleman puts a hand on my shoulder. “Listen, son- you're free to
go now, but if you keep stealing, it's going to catch up with you.
You won't evade the law forever. So you have two choices: you can
either go back to your life and continue as you have been, or you can
follow me and never have to fear again.”
I
balk, not sure if I understand.
“So
which is it?” the gentleman asks.
“I-
I just- I don't know,” I fumble.
“Will
you come with me, or won't you?”
The
gentleman holds out his hand and gives me an encouraging smile.
I
consider my life on the streets. He's right- I won't evade the law
forever. Eventually, my wrongs will catch up with me. “I- I'll
come with you,” I manage to say.
The
gentleman smiles. “Good.” He beckons as he turns to leave.
“Pardon
me for asking sir, but why are you doing this?” I ask, hurrying
after him.
He
turns and looks at me, right in the eyes. “Grace.”
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-Emmarayn Redding
Ooh, I really like this, Emmarayn. If there's a sequel, I'd like to read it. :)
ReplyDeleteComment: in the third section, you said "sell" instead of "cell".
Thanks! :D I'm considering writing a sequel soon. My mother was requesting one specifically.
DeleteAh! Thank you for pointing that out. I shall remedy it at once.
It might interest you to know that the character Jerome is based on a childhood imaginary friend of mine. In my games he was the leader of a gang of street children, of whom I was often a part.
This is amazing!!!! Great job!!!!!
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